Probably a few typos for me to zap, but... postage!
Far, far more descriptive and floweriy than I normally allow. I really hope the second part, for all its brevity, pulls off the sense of scale and majesty I'm aiming for. One of the big themes of the 40Kverse is stagnation, the loss of a better past, and I wanted evoke this. Also note that Sonneillon has effectively committed deicide here...
Demeter is a wreck. Once she would probably have gone toe-to-toe with a Grand Cruiser but she's effectively unmanned, rudderless. She could be utterly destroyed, left to drift in space or slam into the planet's surface. Up to you guys! Zagan would find little use in taking her over, as even he probably can't stop her from spinning and half of her weapons are broken. It's possible he might struggle to possess such an ancient vessel - again, up to you.