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My Character intro - on Iphone

Started by Nemesis, April 16, 2012, 02:14:52 PM

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Dolnikan

That could happen but I can't see why someone would do an adamantium gun case rather than a more visually pleasing material, and why the gel, that could only work is it was meant to be preserved for a long time.
Circles of the wise My attempt at writing something, please comment on it if you have any advise.

Nemesis

Dr. Gilles sure liked his pistol taking a job in a distance colony he had all his items stored away but kept his gun with. Dr gilles died in the colony dome collapse leaving his prized item in his office on his desk? I'm at work midnight on iPhone so quick story is dodgy

Dolnikan

In that case the weapon would have been stored in a more accessible form, especially storing it in an adamantium would be very difficult to do. There is no real reason for it to be that old, a more recent make could also play the part without having a character with immensely much luck in finding ancient stuff.
Circles of the wise My attempt at writing something, please comment on it if you have any advise.

Nemesis

Yeah thinking that to, originally plan was a spoilofwar gang fight or a noble scryer (spelling) that ventures into the lower hive but don't know still thinking. It's here eyes and a large pistol that is her and the warband is a mantle of robots with one master control unit the female

Dolnikan

The weapon could have been taken from a ganger, those tend to love their overpowered pistols and this certainly is one. It could also have belonged to a bounty hunter tasked with tracking down those metal monsters people are talking about.
Circles of the wise My attempt at writing something, please comment on it if you have any advise.

Nemesis

yes! dolnikan bounty hunter powerful pistol with density finder and laser sight with AP bullets, metal monsters being my creations I see and I like it

Nemesis

One of my mates, mates want to play and wants to play a bounty hunter which is good. He's going with a group of four (three merc's (calling themselves the machine-gun brothers) and a anti-amour bounty hunter). My other mates are thinking where would an anti armor bounty hunter come form. Their thoughts are that there are machine flesh machines in the hive sump and theses monster sometimes venture out of the sump and attack underhive and this things are to be hunted down for bounty and given over to someone adeptus mechanicus before they venture to high in the the hive?

So the hive where at now has bileworms, cannibal mutants and machine beasts or something changes the mutants into machine beasts and sends them into the underhive?

Dolnikan

What does your friend mean by an anti-armour bounty hunter? Is it more of a tank hunter type or someone who just uses armour-piercing weapons?

Armour piercing weapons are useful in certain situations, such as when the people you hunt tend to put on a lot of body armour. Weapons that can actually damage armoured vehicles should probably not be used much in inquisitor, they would too easily tear apart any normal foe.
Circles of the wise My attempt at writing something, please comment on it if you have any advise.

Nemesis

I think he was on the idea of he's specialty is anti robot in a sense. Then  the others ask why would there be a bounty hunter that specializes in anti robot/armor they had a chat and came up with another enemy in the underhive which have s bounty on them for each kill and that he knows where to hit armor and take them down. When the bounty is put on my character he takes up the bounty. The warband fights the explores don't know the story and the arbiters don't pay the bounty on the machine beasts ?

Dolnikan

Such machine beasts seem to be a rather strange things, robots are rare and if such creatures would appear there would be more done about it than just hiring a few bounty hunters. An anti-robot specialisation would be very narrow. I would suggest an ordinary bounty hunter who, for some reason, prefers to use weapons that are very effective against armoured targets. The reason for this could be that in the past he has on several occasions hunted down renowned outlaw leaders who were very well armoured, perhaps in carapace armour.

Another option would be that there are groups in the underhive, perhaps a specific kind of gang, or some rather primitive tribes, who make heavy armour outof plates of scrap metal.
Circles of the wise My attempt at writing something, please comment on it if you have any advise.

Nemesis

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Again your ideas are great I'll pass them on. Now I got figure how my character gets her robots and the knowledge as her mentor is a logician bologis. As with the tech priests they would remove her eyes before anything, wouldn't they. So there's no training them maybe she can stay in the underhive after taking out Artavus she takes over his lab but focuses on improving herself through the study of cybernetics?

Dolnikan

That could be a bit difficult to explain yes, but I think that it would be really helpful to have a summary of what you have so far, there has been a pile of ideas floating around here and it is becoming a bit hard to keep track of it all.
Circles of the wise My attempt at writing something, please comment on it if you have any advise.

Nemesis

Got to read "Disciples of the Dark Gods" to sort out the first bit.

Logician Biologis Genators have been funded by the planetary Governor to do research on genetically enhanced soldiers that can be cloned . The lead Logician creates a Batch that leads to (main Character Name) having success in the research he then tries to clone the subject but everyone after this fails with rapid mutations.

He goes back in his research and puts (main character) into the raising program. She turns out to be average only showing talent in her Intelligence and having total recall (photographic memory) and seems to want to focus mainly on study and assist in the research. She initiates into a squad befriending them all and fills the medic and technical support. In her helping of the Logicians she comes across some disturbing information about the future of the research and the actually Logicians themselves.

A test is held and the Subjects are sent into the field which is the underhive to eliminate the gangs as the targets. The tests is the elimination of the subjects field tests most are slaughtered. The main character team survives but still in the field other test subjects are brought in the team is wiped out Main character is knocked out presumed dead no body.

shes left in the underhive, unconscious healing with her heighten healing. she wakes up seeking revenge not for her comrades but for herself, but needing equipment and thrones she searches the underhive. Working as a hire gun and doing settlement repairs she keeps travelling down seeking this treasure of wealth enough to buy equipment and men to bring down Arcturus (archeotech).

Bileworms and finding the eyes. she gets out.

Now here is where i want her to see Logios Cybernetica Robots in action and thinking she doesn't need gangers she needs theses robots maybe helping the Explorer putting down a riot against the explorer wanting the flood the mining pit so he can search for archeotech?

The she needs to ether befriend them or find a dead logios because I want her to have MIU implants to control the robots.

she sneaks into the lab and sets of a series of explosions after accessing the data-slates and killing some subjects. Arcturus sends 2 teams of subjects each team is wiped out. Finding out he hire mercs to do the deed bot fail (going to play the game to get the narrative (hopefully i win) Arcturus sends another team along with a larger group of mercs they two are wiped out or fled.

Arcturus is furious Planetary Governor wants results Arcturus give him the reason the research is failing. The Planetary Governor gives the Arbirties the reason why the Tithes are down due to the Terrorist actions of this character disturbing the lower hive.

Now inquisitor comes into it as he investigates the planetry governor for corruption (doinquisitor do this or Arbirties(cant spell)




Dolnikan

There is a big difference between deciding that she wants robots and actually getting her hands on some of them, they are rare and far beyond the capacities of most people to make.

An option would be that while she is still young a rival group attacks and takes the few more succesful subjects with them as spoils. This rival group of logicians(there could be much logician activity on the planet, perhaps a plot hook). She would still have to be young so she can be indoctrinated into their service, someone older would be much harder to work with. This group is focussed more on robotics type research/ Her skills have made her a suitable leader of more violent missions for her dark masters.

The people who created her could still be alive, they might have fled or some of them simply were not present. They have plenty of reason to want her eliminated, she after all is a threat and they want to destroy their rivals. They would of course want to blame bad things on them and that could make the governor give the clues to the arbites.
Circles of the wise My attempt at writing something, please comment on it if you have any advise.

Nemesis

Kidnapped at a young age indoctrinated to there side what's augments would they give here would she be more tach-priest light servo harness and all that or can she be a test subject fitted with MIU's lending down her back seeing what the limits of there new research is?