General background and profile of my first character =)

[Seelensupergau]

Hello there, Conclave!

I've heard about Inq28 some time ago and I really was fixed by all those stunning conversions that I found on the internet. So there was no other way for me than create an grim Inquisitor with an badass ritinue myself.
My first thoughts lead my directly to an Monodominant Inquisitrix. I've got some background in my mind, but first of all I wanted you to let me know whether the profile of my Inquisitrix is good or not. So, without many words, here it is:

Antonia von Richthofen, Inquisitrix of the Ordo Hereticus

STATS:
WS: 62
BS: 44
S: 43
T: 42
I: 57
Wp: 74
Sg: 71
Nv: 78
Ld: 82
Speed: 4
Antonia is right-handed

EQUIPMENT:

Armour: Cloak with hood (Armor value 2 on all body parts), Hexagrammic wards

Bionics: Average bionic eyes, Average bionic lungs

Ranged Weapons: Hand-flamer, Laspistol

Close Combat Weapons: Chainsword

Special Abilities: Furious Assault, Dodge, Leader, Feint

I wanted here to be the "light but fast" type of warrior. So I choosed Dodge and Feint to show that she can move very fast. I also thought about to change Feint into Lightning reflexes, but I think this would be a little over the top. Furious Assault also shows her fast fighting style, but also her rage against Heretics and all the other scum She is equiped with bionic eyes and lungs because of an accident, there are some storys in my mind for that, but I'm not sure which one is the best at the moment. The Hexagrammic wards show that she really hates Psykers and tries to protect herself against their influence.

So, what do you think? Is she balanced?

Oh! Before I forget: For my character profiles I use the advocated stats from 1337inquisitor in the "What is the "Conclave Standard" character?"-topic. In order for that, I asked myself which strength a character needs to wield an eviscerator without doing half damage. The rulebook says 75, but an charakter with strength 75 based on 1337inquisitor's statline would be an weird mix of Arnold Schwarzenegger, Sly Stallone, an imperial fanatic and 80 pounds of ground beef So, to equip a character with an eviscerator without penaltys, what strength should he have? (If the advocated stregth is to high to fit to the characters background that I'm thinking of, I easily would equip him with a chainsword of course, but an eviscerator looks so daaaamn cool! :'D)

Thanks for your time!

[MarcoSkoll]

I've got some background in my mind, but first of all I wanted you to let me know whether the profile of my Inquisitrix is good or not.

As we always say, it's hard to really evaluate a character without at least some background, so what follows is only rough notes...

WS 62 - it's a state of decent competency in melee. Not a fine swordswoman, but enough to probably survive a brawl.

BS 44 - really shows she doesn't care much for using guns. This would be about the skill I might give to a character who was trained in the operation of a firearm, but didn't have much practice actually using it.

S 43 - not that strong really. While the rulebook does say S50 is a "fit human like a soldier", I'd generally scrap the "like a soldier" part given that soldiers are considerably more than mere fitness.

T 42 - I'd definitely increase this. Because of the way toughness scales, I'd consider T 40 an absolute minimum for a character, even the most feeble wisened character you can imagine. They're just too flimsy to play well at less than that.
Unless she's actually meant to be frail, start at 50 or more.

I 57 - pretty low for an Inquisitor, who naturally have the observation, reactions and paranoia to deserve higher. For me, almost all Inquisitors would be more than I 60, most more than 70.

Mental stats:

Wp 74 - seems fair enough for an Inquisitor. But again, can't really say if it's appropriate without knowing more about her.

Sg 71  - see above.

Nv 78 -  I tend to consider Nv 80 the point at which a character becomes suicidally brave or foolhardy, so it's possible this may be too high for her.

Ld 82 - reasonable enough for an Inquisitor. See note about not knowing enough about her though.

Furious Assault and Feint - these don't really mesh, as they represent totally different fighting styles. Based on your descriptions, I'd suggest keeping Furious Assault over Feint.

Dodge - This, in of itself, shouldn't be thought of as being a representation of a character's speed. It's not inappropriate, but bear in mind it could legitimately be given to a I 25 character (they just wouldn't be very good at it).

However, if you are taking my advice regarding her Initiative, do bear in mind that it can become rather dominating on a high Initiative character (with moments where a shooter suddenly has to deal with a -60 penalty).

Leader - although the rulebook says it's an automatic include for an Inquisitor, I don't agree. Inquisitors aren't automatically good combat leaders that can inspire their troops in battle - so do think about whether it's necessarily appropriate for her.

In order for that, I asked myself which strength a character needs to wield an eviscerator without doing half damage.

We discussed this recently: http://www.the-conclave.co.uk/forum/index.php?topic=2305.0

As far as my suggestion in that thread, I'd suggest making Eviscerators something like Great(65).

[Seelensupergau]

Thank you for your first thoughts! 
Now I see that she is a little...underdeveloped in some Stats, so I will change things up a little. But, as you said, without background you guys will never know what knd of profile fits for Madame Von Richthofen, so I'll definitely bring up some fluff the next days! Thank you once again! 

[Seelensupergau]

So, I've changed up things a little bit because of the nice help of marco.
Her is the new profile:

Antonia von Richthofen, Inquisitrix of the Ordo Hereticus

WS: 74
BS: 62
S: 54
T: 53
I: 72
Wp: 74
Sg: 71
Nv: 73
Ld: 82
Speed: 5
Antonia is right-handed

EQUIPMENT:

Armour: Cloak with hood (Armor value 2 on all body parts), Hexagrammic wards

Bionics: Average bionic eyes, Average bionic lungs

Ranged Weapons: Hand-flamer, Laspistol

Close Combat Weapons: Chainsword

Special Abilities: Furious Assault, Swordsman, Leader, First Strike


Inquisitrix Antonia von Richthofen, a member of the Ordo haereticus, is known to the faithful servants of the Emperor by many names. Some call her "The Red Judge", whispering to her comrades  how many heretics and false prophets were over given to the flames by her verdict. Others call her "The lioness" and tell themselves stories about a grim woman who strides with calculating, graceful steps through the most debauched districts of the shadiest Macropoles to hunt her corrupted prey with cold logic and razor-sharp intellect. Although many of these stories may be exaggerated, one fact is indisputable:
Antonia of Richthofen is one of the most merciless and most fanatical members of the Inquisition.
As a devotee of the monodominanten philosophy she detests heretics, mutants and xenos, but her favored prey are the servants of chaos. But these dangerous individuals are not the only beings Antonia is hunting for.She tries to erase every weak part of the imperial societey. In one case she ordered subordinated troops of the imperial guard to kill almost three million workers on an imperial mining-planet. The workers had dared to strike because of the inhuman conditions at their workplace. This is just one example of Antonias extremely cold-hearted and calculating behaviour.

If the Inquisitrix captures a heretic or another degenerated creature, she subjects him in front of the "witch court", a  practice of the interrogation and torture that she had developed and perfected. In the course of the witch court there are three phases, each of them more terrible than the one before. All of the phases have one ambition: The heretic must confess his sins against the emeror. The first one is the "Phase the merciful interrogation ". Antonia recites the offenses of the defendant again and again,questions him about con-conspirators extremely in detail and threatens with most terrible torture. If the defendant should stay with his protest of innocence despite everything, the next phase, the phase of "The carthaic interrogation" begins. Antonia herself uses cruel methodes of torture, each one to terrible to speak about, in this phase. Most of the defendants fail in this phase because of the painful cruelties.
But even those who actually endure this phase have no reason to raise hope.
In the last phase, the "Phase of the holy examinations", various ritual examinations are used.
The most of them are almost impossible to master. One of those rituals is "The ritual the glowing
steel" at which the defendant must carry the red-hot sword of a warrior from Antonia's retinue barehanded over a distance which seems adequate for the heaviness of his sins.
Only one man has ever gone through this ritual successfully and carried the glowing blade almost over 3 miles. Another test is "The ritual of the fiery body"  in which the defendant must step in a blazing fire. If he screams during his stay in the flames because of the terrible pain or stops he examination, he has failed.

But not only her merciless and terrible methods brought Antonia von Richthofen a
daunting reputation, her general appearance and her looks also leave everybody in her environment
petrified. By an accident her eyes and lungs have been vitriolised, so they had to be replaced with bionic implants. This underlines her unemotional manner even more, since no more eyes could reveal her feelings now and her lung implant let her voice sound scratchy and metalic. Moreover, she speaks rarely in general and if she does, its always very quite, almost just a whisper. Her movements are calculating and graceful, the reason why she earned her nickname "The lioness". Her pitch-black hair falls straggly into her deathly pale, thin face. Antonia is tall and very slim, almost meager, a stature which reminds a little of a scarecrow.
Anyway, under her black leather clothes which are decorated with bronze armor platings, an exercised and tight body which is hard and sinewy like a whiplash is hiding. Especially eye-catching is, however, her red, long coat with hood which almost covers her complete body. These coat and her methods earned her the name "The red judge". Antonia likes to adorn herself with various religious artefacts, primarily with the skulls and bones of saints of the imperial faith. In addition she always takes a copy of various aphorisms of the imperial church with her.
Her elected weapons are a slim chain sword in a style that is also used by the Adeptus Sororitas
and an ancient flame pistol. Primarily with the sword she is a true master, tearing down her opponents with breathtaking grace and speed. To keep this mastery, she trains very hard almoust every day. 


You see, this is just very basic background. I will come up with more in a few days, showing where excactly Antonia comes from, her childhood and so on But, to see wether the profile fits or not, I think this background can help you guys out

[Seelensupergau]

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[MarcoSkoll]

Around here, a lack of response is often because of the lack of need for a response.

The profile is reasonable and doesn't clash with the background (at least, that which you've posted) ... so there wasn't really much to say.

[Seelensupergau]

I'm sorry,Marco =) I just felt myself a little forgotten :'D And now as it fit's, the project can finally begin. Thanks!

[Koval]

Just about the only thing I can add is that you need to raise her BS and Nv, because neither of those values seem hugely appropriate for an Inquisitor that's as fierce as you've described -- I'd bring both up by about five points.

Oh, and she's Speed 5, your calculation was off

[Seelensupergau]

Thank you, sir! I changed that =)